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One of my players is a demonologist and requested a cantrip related to the field. So I took a crack at it and came up with the following thinking that an attack on the mind was fitting:




Three-Word Curse: Nails



Enchantment cantrip



Casting Time: 1 action



Range: 60 feet



Components: V, M (a fragment of ram horn)



Duration: Concentration, up to 1 minute



You speak in a demonic tongue slowly cursing the mind of a creature you can see within range. If the target can hear you (though it need not understand you), it must succeed a Wisdom saving throw to end the spell. On each of your turns for the duration, you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again. The spell ends if you use your action to do anything else. On the third failed attempt by the target, it experiences the feeling of several nails piercing their skull simultaneously and takes 5d8 psychic damage, and the spell then ends.



The spell's damage increases by 1d8 when you reach 5th level (6d8), 11th level (7d8), and 17th level (8d8).




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    Was it intended that the target has to fail the three saving throws consecutively or was it just poor wording? I am asking because if that's the case it doesn't make sense to put it as 10 rounds duration, 3 rounds would be enough and then the character casts it again if the target has succeeded in any saving throw, so it seems intended that the failures did not need to be consecutive.
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One of my players is a demonologist and requested a cantrip related to the field. So I took a crack at it and came up with the following thinking that an attack on the mind was fitting:




Three-Word Curse: Nails



Enchantment cantrip



Casting Time: 1 action



Range: 60 feet



Components: V, M (a fragment of ram horn)



Duration: Concentration, up to 1 minute



You speak in a demonic tongue slowly cursing the mind of a creature you can see within range. If the target can hear you (though it need not understand you), it must succeed a Wisdom saving throw to end the spell. On each of your turns for the duration, you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again. The spell ends if you use your action to do anything else. On the third failed attempt by the target, it experiences the feeling of several nails piercing their skull simultaneously and takes 5d8 psychic damage, and the spell then ends.



The spell's damage increases by 1d8 when you reach 5th level (6d8), 11th level (7d8), and 17th level (8d8).




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    Was it intended that the target has to fail the three saving throws consecutively or was it just poor wording? I am asking because if that's the case it doesn't make sense to put it as 10 rounds duration, 3 rounds would be enough and then the character casts it again if the target has succeeded in any saving throw, so it seems intended that the failures did not need to be consecutive.
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One of my players is a demonologist and requested a cantrip related to the field. So I took a crack at it and came up with the following thinking that an attack on the mind was fitting:




Three-Word Curse: Nails



Enchantment cantrip



Casting Time: 1 action



Range: 60 feet



Components: V, M (a fragment of ram horn)



Duration: Concentration, up to 1 minute



You speak in a demonic tongue slowly cursing the mind of a creature you can see within range. If the target can hear you (though it need not understand you), it must succeed a Wisdom saving throw to end the spell. On each of your turns for the duration, you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again. The spell ends if you use your action to do anything else. On the third failed attempt by the target, it experiences the feeling of several nails piercing their skull simultaneously and takes 5d8 psychic damage, and the spell then ends.



The spell's damage increases by 1d8 when you reach 5th level (6d8), 11th level (7d8), and 17th level (8d8).




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One of my players is a demonologist and requested a cantrip related to the field. So I took a crack at it and came up with the following thinking that an attack on the mind was fitting:




Three-Word Curse: Nails



Enchantment cantrip



Casting Time: 1 action



Range: 60 feet



Components: V, M (a fragment of ram horn)



Duration: Concentration, up to 1 minute



You speak in a demonic tongue slowly cursing the mind of a creature you can see within range. If the target can hear you (though it need not understand you), it must succeed a Wisdom saving throw to end the spell. On each of your turns for the duration, you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again. The spell ends if you use your action to do anything else. On the third failed attempt by the target, it experiences the feeling of several nails piercing their skull simultaneously and takes 5d8 psychic damage, and the spell then ends.



The spell's damage increases by 1d8 when you reach 5th level (6d8), 11th level (7d8), and 17th level (8d8).




Does the risk of wasting the invested time balance the high damage reward?







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    Was it intended that the target has to fail the three saving throws consecutively or was it just poor wording? I am asking because if that's the case it doesn't make sense to put it as 10 rounds duration, 3 rounds would be enough and then the character casts it again if the target has succeeded in any saving throw, so it seems intended that the failures did not need to be consecutive.
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Was it intended that the target has to fail the three saving throws consecutively or was it just poor wording? I am asking because if that's the case it doesn't make sense to put it as 10 rounds duration, 3 rounds would be enough and then the character casts it again if the target has succeeded in any saving throw, so it seems intended that the failures did not need to be consecutive.
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Was it intended that the target has to fail the three saving throws consecutively or was it just poor wording? I am asking because if that's the case it doesn't make sense to put it as 10 rounds duration, 3 rounds would be enough and then the character casts it again if the target has succeeded in any saving throw, so it seems intended that the failures did not need to be consecutive.
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The risk/cost is too high



The cost is:




  • Concentration

  • Three Actions


This is a rather high investment to start with, but there is also the risk:




  • The target needs to fail 3 saves

  • These have to be consecutive


Below level 5 the damage potential of this spell (5d8) is higher than other cantrips (3d12 with toll the dead is the next), but on higher levels it seriously starts to lag behind. Other cantrips also get +1dX, but they can be used 3x as often.



Add to this the aforementioned risk. Requiring 3 saves already gives this a low chance to succeed, but to achieve that on 3 consecutive rolls plunges the chance of success even deeper. The effective time/action investment will be way over 3 because of needing to restart on any successful save. This spell will extremely rarely do anything, especially considering that most combats do not last for even 10 turns (usual is 5-8 in my experience).



All in all this spell is so risky I would dare to call it near useless and the damage progression is miscalculated.



Recommendations



If you want to preserve the "three word" aspect, imitate spells like contagion and do not require the failed saves to be consecutive, but end the spell with 3 successful ones (also not necessarily consecutive). A mechanic resembling death saves. And either do not require any further action investment (like other such spells) or make it a bonus action. Also, I would advise you to make it a higher level spell, not a cantrip.



If you want to just make a more thematically appropriate cantrip, reskinning an existing one would be much easier to do and to balance.






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  • What you are proposing is a en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Negative_binomial_distribution and its not much of an improvement. Assuming the target fails their saving throws 60% of the time you still only have a 55% chance of success after 10 rounds. How many combats have you seen that went more than 5?
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    @DaleM I see that I was not completely clear, since with my propsed method, the spell cannot go on for 10 rounds. It must be over after the 5th roll (2*fail+2*success, last decides). My calculations for 60% fail chance give a 68.256% chance for the spell to deal damage.
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    I see, the description says only the first save ends the spell.
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  • @Harper Nope, it says "attempt the Wisdom saving throw again", which means that they have the same effect.
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The other answers give a good picture on why the spell is, from a mechanical perspective, too weak. I will touch on that too, but also a couple of game design points that might help yiu understand why this spell won't work very well.



From a purely mechanical point of view, "succeed on more rolls to inflict more damage" is a workable concept. The expected damage output should be very high compared to normal cantrips to offset the fact that for normal cantrips, two successes (for three castings) inflict 2/3 of the damage one would inflict on three hits, while the "all-or-nothing" approach of the three word curse would inflict no damage unless all rolls succeeded. (Or failed, from the saving creature's POV)



However, mechanical balance isn't enough to make a cantrip good. I forecast problems relating to the use of this spell in tables.



It should be used early...



Suppose you're fighting a group of nasties and choose to use TWC. Three rounds later, you may have a chance to deal 5d8 damage ...if the combat is still going on. Many encounters last for a surprisingly small number of rounds, so TWC: Nails would probably find itself used mostly as an opener, because it might not get a chance to fire later on and 5d8 against an enemy weakened by the action already would be more likely to be an overkill.



...but early turns are too valuable to waste



Removing enemies from the encounter during the first turns is very valuable in DnD, strategically, because every removed enemy shifts the action economy to favor the PCs. Removing enemies during the first turns is something TWC: Nails can't do, but since it has little use later in the combat too, it's an inadvisable spell to use regardless.



Inaction is boring



This is the worst part to me. TWC: Nails will have the player essentially skipping three turns in order to have a chance to deal relatively massive damage. Assuming the spell dealt enough damage to be mechanically appealing, you'd be promoting an extremely boring style of gameplay to your players --- don't do that. As a general rule, make fun choices strong and strong choices fun, so players don't feel tempted to min-max themselves into something boring.



Poor party synergy



Especially assuming the cantrip gets the damage buff to make it mechanically competitive, another problem sets in --- it's overkill against many types of enemies. To avoid wasting that sweet damage, it encourages the players to not target the enemy targeted with TWC. Reserving enemies for oneself gets stale fast and can cause a lot of tension among the players, and can also result in very swingy outcomes: if the spell fails, you're gonna wish you had put in some damage instead of trusting the dice.



Bookkeeping



The spell forces an additional bookkeeping need for the players or the GM. It's a minor issue, but still one more thing I'd change.



Overall



The spell seems like something that might be a workable concept in a computer game where turns can be executed in mere seconds. However, in DnD, I think even the part where you have to idle during combat to have a chance to deal damage is unacceptable. The spell's concept is neat, but ultimately just a gimmick that can't be the sole justification of its existence.



If you want to preserve the "three strikes", I recommend the following changes:
- make the spell deal some damage on every failed save
- don't require the saves to be consecutive
- the third failed save deals extra damage
- no concentration needed



It's still not my favorite kind of spell, but it's more flexible in its use than before and far less swingy.






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    Way too weak.



    Most foes will be dead before it does anything. And even if the target fails every save, it is 3 actions for 22.5 damage or 7.5 damage/action.



    Unlike most attacks, you have to hit 3 times for it to do anything.



    If the foe fails 60% of the time that is a 21.6% chance it does anything. If they fail 80% of the time, your chance of it doing damage is about 50-50. This is horrible.



    3 turn delay, horrible accuracy, mediocre effect, bad scaling.




    Three-Word Curse: Nails



    Enchantment cantrip



    Casting Time: 1 action



    Range: 60 feet



    Components: V, M (a fragment of ram horn)



    Duration: Concentration, up to 1 minute



    As an action, you speak the first word in a demonic tongue slowly cursing the mind of a single creature you can see within range who can hear you. The target creature must make a Wisdom saving throw. If they succeed, the spell fails. If they fail, they suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn and feel nails hovering around their head in every direction. They remain under the curse until concentration is broken, or a minute passes.



    While the creature remains under the curse, you may spend an action to utter the 2nd word. The creature must make a Wisdom saving throw or feel the tip of the nails penetrate their skull. They suffer 1d8 psychic damage and again suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn.



    If their save succeeds, you can try uttering the 2nd word again until the curse ends or they fail. When they fail their save against the 2nd word, you can now instead utter the 3rd word of the curse as an action once until the curse ends.



    When you utter the 3rd word, they must make another Wisdom save or feel the nails slam into their skull from all directions. This causes 4d8 psychic damage, and they suffer disadvantage on all attacks until the end of your next turn. Once the 3rd word has been uttered, the curse ends, regardless of the result of the save.



    The spell's damage increases by 1d8 when you reach 5th level, 11th and 17th level. This applies to the damage from both the 2nd and 3rd word.




    I did a few things.




    1. I added disadvantage on attacks. Like vicious mockery.


    2. I moved some damage up to the 2nd curse word.


    3. I doubled the rate of damage scaling (by having it apply twice).


    4. You can now utter the first word of the curse and hold it in reserve with concentration.


    5. Succeeding in a save against the 2nd word doesn't remove the curse. The caster can try again and again until it takes hold.



    The curse now has an effect right away (disadvantage). If you hit "twice" you get damage similar to Vicious Mockery, and 3 times to deal decent damage.



    Ignoring concentration, this ability is now stronger than Vicious Mockery. Add in concentration and it looks more reasonable.






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      From the description of the spell you can repeat the 3rd word over and over again once you get to it. is this intended? that much damage every turn seems powerful even after the concentration and wait. either way is more balenced than the questioned cantra so +1
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    • @rpgstsr no, after the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends. You can repeat the 2nd however. But clarified.
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    • Perhaps stating that by putting in "once the 3rd word is used it cannot be used again" after "...nails slam into their skull from all sides" would make more sense because as it is it doesn't specify that.
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    • other issues: Damage type of 2nd word (psychic) Damage increases effects 2nd and 3rd? 3rd doesnt end the spell in the description.
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    • @rpgstar "After the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends" -- I am puzzled why that quote isn't clear? Or maybe I misunderstand what you find unclear, for double plus ungood communication. ;)
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    Your proposed mechanism requires 3 consecutive failed saves starting with the first. As such, the 1 minute duration is irrelevant - it will all be over in at most 3 rounds.



    D&D aims to have a "hit rate" (including failed saving throws) of about 60%. assuming that your target has this chance of failing their saving throw, chaining 3 of these together gives a 21.6% success rate.



    In addition, you are proposing that this requires concentration. So, unlike every other damaging cantrip it is not certain that it will "go off" and it means you can't be concentrating on anything else.



    Damaging cantrips



    Damaging cantrips are for a spellcaster what making an attack is for a martial class - the default action to take when you have no better options. Specifically:




    • They don't use up resources (e.g. spell slots)

    • They use up 1 action

    • They are all or nothing in terms of damage

    • They scale with character level, either by increasing in damage or adding additional targets


    Saving throw cantrips



    There are 4 cantrips in the PHB that have a saving throw:



    $$begin{array}{|c|c|c|c|c|c|}
    hline
    textbf{Spell}& textbf{Range} & textbf{Damage} & textbf{Expected*} & textbf{Save} &textbf{Extra} \ hline
    textit{Acid Splash} & text{60} & text{1d6 acid} & 2.1text{ or }4.2 & text{Dex} & text{Up to 2 targets within 5 feet} \ hline
    textit{Poison Spray} & text{10} & text{1d12 poison} & 3.9 & text{Con} & text{} \ hline
    textit{Sacred Flame} & text{60} & text{1d8 radiant} & 2.7 & text{Dex} & text{} \ hline
    textit{Vicious Mockery} & text{60} & text{1d4 psychic} & 1.5 & text{Wis} & text{Disadvantage on next attack roll} \ hline
    textit{TWC: Nails} & text{60} & text{5d8 psychic} & 1.62 & text{Wis} & text{Takes 3 rounds w/- concentration} \ hline
    end{array}$$




    • Expected damage assuming the target needs to roll an 13 or better to save (60% success rate) and dividing by 3 for your cantrip because it takes 3 rounds.


    So, given these comparisons, would you chose this cantrip? By the way, this is at levels 1-4 - the spell only gets worse after than in comparison.



    Use one of these as a model



    Make it the same as Sacred Flame only with psychic damage and your flavour text.



    Or reduce the range and do more damage like Poison Spray or reduce the damage and allow it to affect more people like Acid Splash or reduce the damage and give it an effect like Vicious Mockery.



    Whatever you do, you need to drop the multi-round nature of the effect - that's not how cantrips work.






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    • The effect of a save ending the spell only is discussed in the context of the first save. If the target fails the first save, subsequent saves do not end the spell.
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      @Harper Disagreed. As written, succeeding the (first) Saving Throw ends the spell. The other saving throws are just repetitions ("you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again."), thus are subject to the same conditions, as it is the same Saving Throw, and should also end the spell. That said, it does not make any sense that the duration is 10 rounds, as it will either deal damage in the first three rounds or end as soon as the target succeeds, so I suppose this was not intended by the asker.
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    • @HellSaint yes I got that meaning the first time I read it. After answers here made me realize the mechanic was completely, obviously idiotic, I read it more closely, because I did not believe people intentionally write obviously idiotic rules. Indeed, failing the second save has a different effect: it does not apply the curse because the curse is already applied. It lasts 1m or until concentration breaks, just as it says. It simply adds another word/stack and the save is to prevent that. Try reading it very carefully, though I agree the wording is too vague for publication.
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    As other posters have said, it is too risky and action consuming for the reward. I think spending such a large portion of the combat on just one skill sounds like the players would have less fun.



    What if you make it cost an action to cast, and then cost a bonus action to mutter an additional word. Each word could do something immediately and target different creatures. At each level in which you would normally grant it straight extra damage, you could add an extra word in the sequence, possibly based on the characters lore.



    Adjust the balance accordingly and this sounds like a fun unique ability.






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      The risk/cost is too high



      The cost is:




      • Concentration

      • Three Actions


      This is a rather high investment to start with, but there is also the risk:




      • The target needs to fail 3 saves

      • These have to be consecutive


      Below level 5 the damage potential of this spell (5d8) is higher than other cantrips (3d12 with toll the dead is the next), but on higher levels it seriously starts to lag behind. Other cantrips also get +1dX, but they can be used 3x as often.



      Add to this the aforementioned risk. Requiring 3 saves already gives this a low chance to succeed, but to achieve that on 3 consecutive rolls plunges the chance of success even deeper. The effective time/action investment will be way over 3 because of needing to restart on any successful save. This spell will extremely rarely do anything, especially considering that most combats do not last for even 10 turns (usual is 5-8 in my experience).



      All in all this spell is so risky I would dare to call it near useless and the damage progression is miscalculated.



      Recommendations



      If you want to preserve the "three word" aspect, imitate spells like contagion and do not require the failed saves to be consecutive, but end the spell with 3 successful ones (also not necessarily consecutive). A mechanic resembling death saves. And either do not require any further action investment (like other such spells) or make it a bonus action. Also, I would advise you to make it a higher level spell, not a cantrip.



      If you want to just make a more thematically appropriate cantrip, reskinning an existing one would be much easier to do and to balance.






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      • What you are proposing is a en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Negative_binomial_distribution and its not much of an improvement. Assuming the target fails their saving throws 60% of the time you still only have a 55% chance of success after 10 rounds. How many combats have you seen that went more than 5?
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        @DaleM I see that I was not completely clear, since with my propsed method, the spell cannot go on for 10 rounds. It must be over after the 5th roll (2*fail+2*success, last decides). My calculations for 60% fail chance give a 68.256% chance for the spell to deal damage.
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        I see, the description says only the first save ends the spell.
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      • @Harper Nope, it says "attempt the Wisdom saving throw again", which means that they have the same effect.
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      The risk/cost is too high



      The cost is:




      • Concentration

      • Three Actions


      This is a rather high investment to start with, but there is also the risk:




      • The target needs to fail 3 saves

      • These have to be consecutive


      Below level 5 the damage potential of this spell (5d8) is higher than other cantrips (3d12 with toll the dead is the next), but on higher levels it seriously starts to lag behind. Other cantrips also get +1dX, but they can be used 3x as often.



      Add to this the aforementioned risk. Requiring 3 saves already gives this a low chance to succeed, but to achieve that on 3 consecutive rolls plunges the chance of success even deeper. The effective time/action investment will be way over 3 because of needing to restart on any successful save. This spell will extremely rarely do anything, especially considering that most combats do not last for even 10 turns (usual is 5-8 in my experience).



      All in all this spell is so risky I would dare to call it near useless and the damage progression is miscalculated.



      Recommendations



      If you want to preserve the "three word" aspect, imitate spells like contagion and do not require the failed saves to be consecutive, but end the spell with 3 successful ones (also not necessarily consecutive). A mechanic resembling death saves. And either do not require any further action investment (like other such spells) or make it a bonus action. Also, I would advise you to make it a higher level spell, not a cantrip.



      If you want to just make a more thematically appropriate cantrip, reskinning an existing one would be much easier to do and to balance.






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      • What you are proposing is a en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Negative_binomial_distribution and its not much of an improvement. Assuming the target fails their saving throws 60% of the time you still only have a 55% chance of success after 10 rounds. How many combats have you seen that went more than 5?
        – Dale M
        Nov 19 at 2:15






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        @DaleM I see that I was not completely clear, since with my propsed method, the spell cannot go on for 10 rounds. It must be over after the 5th roll (2*fail+2*success, last decides). My calculations for 60% fail chance give a 68.256% chance for the spell to deal damage.
        – Szega
        Nov 19 at 5:11






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        I see, the description says only the first save ends the spell.
        – Harper
        Nov 19 at 21:56










      • @Harper Nope, it says "attempt the Wisdom saving throw again", which means that they have the same effect.
        – Szega
        Nov 20 at 7:58













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      The risk/cost is too high



      The cost is:




      • Concentration

      • Three Actions


      This is a rather high investment to start with, but there is also the risk:




      • The target needs to fail 3 saves

      • These have to be consecutive


      Below level 5 the damage potential of this spell (5d8) is higher than other cantrips (3d12 with toll the dead is the next), but on higher levels it seriously starts to lag behind. Other cantrips also get +1dX, but they can be used 3x as often.



      Add to this the aforementioned risk. Requiring 3 saves already gives this a low chance to succeed, but to achieve that on 3 consecutive rolls plunges the chance of success even deeper. The effective time/action investment will be way over 3 because of needing to restart on any successful save. This spell will extremely rarely do anything, especially considering that most combats do not last for even 10 turns (usual is 5-8 in my experience).



      All in all this spell is so risky I would dare to call it near useless and the damage progression is miscalculated.



      Recommendations



      If you want to preserve the "three word" aspect, imitate spells like contagion and do not require the failed saves to be consecutive, but end the spell with 3 successful ones (also not necessarily consecutive). A mechanic resembling death saves. And either do not require any further action investment (like other such spells) or make it a bonus action. Also, I would advise you to make it a higher level spell, not a cantrip.



      If you want to just make a more thematically appropriate cantrip, reskinning an existing one would be much easier to do and to balance.






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      The risk/cost is too high



      The cost is:




      • Concentration

      • Three Actions


      This is a rather high investment to start with, but there is also the risk:




      • The target needs to fail 3 saves

      • These have to be consecutive


      Below level 5 the damage potential of this spell (5d8) is higher than other cantrips (3d12 with toll the dead is the next), but on higher levels it seriously starts to lag behind. Other cantrips also get +1dX, but they can be used 3x as often.



      Add to this the aforementioned risk. Requiring 3 saves already gives this a low chance to succeed, but to achieve that on 3 consecutive rolls plunges the chance of success even deeper. The effective time/action investment will be way over 3 because of needing to restart on any successful save. This spell will extremely rarely do anything, especially considering that most combats do not last for even 10 turns (usual is 5-8 in my experience).



      All in all this spell is so risky I would dare to call it near useless and the damage progression is miscalculated.



      Recommendations



      If you want to preserve the "three word" aspect, imitate spells like contagion and do not require the failed saves to be consecutive, but end the spell with 3 successful ones (also not necessarily consecutive). A mechanic resembling death saves. And either do not require any further action investment (like other such spells) or make it a bonus action. Also, I would advise you to make it a higher level spell, not a cantrip.



      If you want to just make a more thematically appropriate cantrip, reskinning an existing one would be much easier to do and to balance.







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      edited Nov 18 at 23:16









      V2Blast

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      answered Nov 18 at 22:27









      Szega

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      • What you are proposing is a en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Negative_binomial_distribution and its not much of an improvement. Assuming the target fails their saving throws 60% of the time you still only have a 55% chance of success after 10 rounds. How many combats have you seen that went more than 5?
        – Dale M
        Nov 19 at 2:15






      • 2




        @DaleM I see that I was not completely clear, since with my propsed method, the spell cannot go on for 10 rounds. It must be over after the 5th roll (2*fail+2*success, last decides). My calculations for 60% fail chance give a 68.256% chance for the spell to deal damage.
        – Szega
        Nov 19 at 5:11






      • 1




        I see, the description says only the first save ends the spell.
        – Harper
        Nov 19 at 21:56










      • @Harper Nope, it says "attempt the Wisdom saving throw again", which means that they have the same effect.
        – Szega
        Nov 20 at 7:58


















      • What you are proposing is a en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Negative_binomial_distribution and its not much of an improvement. Assuming the target fails their saving throws 60% of the time you still only have a 55% chance of success after 10 rounds. How many combats have you seen that went more than 5?
        – Dale M
        Nov 19 at 2:15






      • 2




        @DaleM I see that I was not completely clear, since with my propsed method, the spell cannot go on for 10 rounds. It must be over after the 5th roll (2*fail+2*success, last decides). My calculations for 60% fail chance give a 68.256% chance for the spell to deal damage.
        – Szega
        Nov 19 at 5:11






      • 1




        I see, the description says only the first save ends the spell.
        – Harper
        Nov 19 at 21:56










      • @Harper Nope, it says "attempt the Wisdom saving throw again", which means that they have the same effect.
        – Szega
        Nov 20 at 7:58
















      What you are proposing is a en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Negative_binomial_distribution and its not much of an improvement. Assuming the target fails their saving throws 60% of the time you still only have a 55% chance of success after 10 rounds. How many combats have you seen that went more than 5?
      – Dale M
      Nov 19 at 2:15




      What you are proposing is a en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Negative_binomial_distribution and its not much of an improvement. Assuming the target fails their saving throws 60% of the time you still only have a 55% chance of success after 10 rounds. How many combats have you seen that went more than 5?
      – Dale M
      Nov 19 at 2:15




      2




      2




      @DaleM I see that I was not completely clear, since with my propsed method, the spell cannot go on for 10 rounds. It must be over after the 5th roll (2*fail+2*success, last decides). My calculations for 60% fail chance give a 68.256% chance for the spell to deal damage.
      – Szega
      Nov 19 at 5:11




      @DaleM I see that I was not completely clear, since with my propsed method, the spell cannot go on for 10 rounds. It must be over after the 5th roll (2*fail+2*success, last decides). My calculations for 60% fail chance give a 68.256% chance for the spell to deal damage.
      – Szega
      Nov 19 at 5:11




      1




      1




      I see, the description says only the first save ends the spell.
      – Harper
      Nov 19 at 21:56




      I see, the description says only the first save ends the spell.
      – Harper
      Nov 19 at 21:56












      @Harper Nope, it says "attempt the Wisdom saving throw again", which means that they have the same effect.
      – Szega
      Nov 20 at 7:58




      @Harper Nope, it says "attempt the Wisdom saving throw again", which means that they have the same effect.
      – Szega
      Nov 20 at 7:58












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      The other answers give a good picture on why the spell is, from a mechanical perspective, too weak. I will touch on that too, but also a couple of game design points that might help yiu understand why this spell won't work very well.



      From a purely mechanical point of view, "succeed on more rolls to inflict more damage" is a workable concept. The expected damage output should be very high compared to normal cantrips to offset the fact that for normal cantrips, two successes (for three castings) inflict 2/3 of the damage one would inflict on three hits, while the "all-or-nothing" approach of the three word curse would inflict no damage unless all rolls succeeded. (Or failed, from the saving creature's POV)



      However, mechanical balance isn't enough to make a cantrip good. I forecast problems relating to the use of this spell in tables.



      It should be used early...



      Suppose you're fighting a group of nasties and choose to use TWC. Three rounds later, you may have a chance to deal 5d8 damage ...if the combat is still going on. Many encounters last for a surprisingly small number of rounds, so TWC: Nails would probably find itself used mostly as an opener, because it might not get a chance to fire later on and 5d8 against an enemy weakened by the action already would be more likely to be an overkill.



      ...but early turns are too valuable to waste



      Removing enemies from the encounter during the first turns is very valuable in DnD, strategically, because every removed enemy shifts the action economy to favor the PCs. Removing enemies during the first turns is something TWC: Nails can't do, but since it has little use later in the combat too, it's an inadvisable spell to use regardless.



      Inaction is boring



      This is the worst part to me. TWC: Nails will have the player essentially skipping three turns in order to have a chance to deal relatively massive damage. Assuming the spell dealt enough damage to be mechanically appealing, you'd be promoting an extremely boring style of gameplay to your players --- don't do that. As a general rule, make fun choices strong and strong choices fun, so players don't feel tempted to min-max themselves into something boring.



      Poor party synergy



      Especially assuming the cantrip gets the damage buff to make it mechanically competitive, another problem sets in --- it's overkill against many types of enemies. To avoid wasting that sweet damage, it encourages the players to not target the enemy targeted with TWC. Reserving enemies for oneself gets stale fast and can cause a lot of tension among the players, and can also result in very swingy outcomes: if the spell fails, you're gonna wish you had put in some damage instead of trusting the dice.



      Bookkeeping



      The spell forces an additional bookkeeping need for the players or the GM. It's a minor issue, but still one more thing I'd change.



      Overall



      The spell seems like something that might be a workable concept in a computer game where turns can be executed in mere seconds. However, in DnD, I think even the part where you have to idle during combat to have a chance to deal damage is unacceptable. The spell's concept is neat, but ultimately just a gimmick that can't be the sole justification of its existence.



      If you want to preserve the "three strikes", I recommend the following changes:
      - make the spell deal some damage on every failed save
      - don't require the saves to be consecutive
      - the third failed save deals extra damage
      - no concentration needed



      It's still not my favorite kind of spell, but it's more flexible in its use than before and far less swingy.






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        up vote
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        down vote













        The other answers give a good picture on why the spell is, from a mechanical perspective, too weak. I will touch on that too, but also a couple of game design points that might help yiu understand why this spell won't work very well.



        From a purely mechanical point of view, "succeed on more rolls to inflict more damage" is a workable concept. The expected damage output should be very high compared to normal cantrips to offset the fact that for normal cantrips, two successes (for three castings) inflict 2/3 of the damage one would inflict on three hits, while the "all-or-nothing" approach of the three word curse would inflict no damage unless all rolls succeeded. (Or failed, from the saving creature's POV)



        However, mechanical balance isn't enough to make a cantrip good. I forecast problems relating to the use of this spell in tables.



        It should be used early...



        Suppose you're fighting a group of nasties and choose to use TWC. Three rounds later, you may have a chance to deal 5d8 damage ...if the combat is still going on. Many encounters last for a surprisingly small number of rounds, so TWC: Nails would probably find itself used mostly as an opener, because it might not get a chance to fire later on and 5d8 against an enemy weakened by the action already would be more likely to be an overkill.



        ...but early turns are too valuable to waste



        Removing enemies from the encounter during the first turns is very valuable in DnD, strategically, because every removed enemy shifts the action economy to favor the PCs. Removing enemies during the first turns is something TWC: Nails can't do, but since it has little use later in the combat too, it's an inadvisable spell to use regardless.



        Inaction is boring



        This is the worst part to me. TWC: Nails will have the player essentially skipping three turns in order to have a chance to deal relatively massive damage. Assuming the spell dealt enough damage to be mechanically appealing, you'd be promoting an extremely boring style of gameplay to your players --- don't do that. As a general rule, make fun choices strong and strong choices fun, so players don't feel tempted to min-max themselves into something boring.



        Poor party synergy



        Especially assuming the cantrip gets the damage buff to make it mechanically competitive, another problem sets in --- it's overkill against many types of enemies. To avoid wasting that sweet damage, it encourages the players to not target the enemy targeted with TWC. Reserving enemies for oneself gets stale fast and can cause a lot of tension among the players, and can also result in very swingy outcomes: if the spell fails, you're gonna wish you had put in some damage instead of trusting the dice.



        Bookkeeping



        The spell forces an additional bookkeeping need for the players or the GM. It's a minor issue, but still one more thing I'd change.



        Overall



        The spell seems like something that might be a workable concept in a computer game where turns can be executed in mere seconds. However, in DnD, I think even the part where you have to idle during combat to have a chance to deal damage is unacceptable. The spell's concept is neat, but ultimately just a gimmick that can't be the sole justification of its existence.



        If you want to preserve the "three strikes", I recommend the following changes:
        - make the spell deal some damage on every failed save
        - don't require the saves to be consecutive
        - the third failed save deals extra damage
        - no concentration needed



        It's still not my favorite kind of spell, but it's more flexible in its use than before and far less swingy.






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          up vote
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          down vote










          up vote
          16
          down vote









          The other answers give a good picture on why the spell is, from a mechanical perspective, too weak. I will touch on that too, but also a couple of game design points that might help yiu understand why this spell won't work very well.



          From a purely mechanical point of view, "succeed on more rolls to inflict more damage" is a workable concept. The expected damage output should be very high compared to normal cantrips to offset the fact that for normal cantrips, two successes (for three castings) inflict 2/3 of the damage one would inflict on three hits, while the "all-or-nothing" approach of the three word curse would inflict no damage unless all rolls succeeded. (Or failed, from the saving creature's POV)



          However, mechanical balance isn't enough to make a cantrip good. I forecast problems relating to the use of this spell in tables.



          It should be used early...



          Suppose you're fighting a group of nasties and choose to use TWC. Three rounds later, you may have a chance to deal 5d8 damage ...if the combat is still going on. Many encounters last for a surprisingly small number of rounds, so TWC: Nails would probably find itself used mostly as an opener, because it might not get a chance to fire later on and 5d8 against an enemy weakened by the action already would be more likely to be an overkill.



          ...but early turns are too valuable to waste



          Removing enemies from the encounter during the first turns is very valuable in DnD, strategically, because every removed enemy shifts the action economy to favor the PCs. Removing enemies during the first turns is something TWC: Nails can't do, but since it has little use later in the combat too, it's an inadvisable spell to use regardless.



          Inaction is boring



          This is the worst part to me. TWC: Nails will have the player essentially skipping three turns in order to have a chance to deal relatively massive damage. Assuming the spell dealt enough damage to be mechanically appealing, you'd be promoting an extremely boring style of gameplay to your players --- don't do that. As a general rule, make fun choices strong and strong choices fun, so players don't feel tempted to min-max themselves into something boring.



          Poor party synergy



          Especially assuming the cantrip gets the damage buff to make it mechanically competitive, another problem sets in --- it's overkill against many types of enemies. To avoid wasting that sweet damage, it encourages the players to not target the enemy targeted with TWC. Reserving enemies for oneself gets stale fast and can cause a lot of tension among the players, and can also result in very swingy outcomes: if the spell fails, you're gonna wish you had put in some damage instead of trusting the dice.



          Bookkeeping



          The spell forces an additional bookkeeping need for the players or the GM. It's a minor issue, but still one more thing I'd change.



          Overall



          The spell seems like something that might be a workable concept in a computer game where turns can be executed in mere seconds. However, in DnD, I think even the part where you have to idle during combat to have a chance to deal damage is unacceptable. The spell's concept is neat, but ultimately just a gimmick that can't be the sole justification of its existence.



          If you want to preserve the "three strikes", I recommend the following changes:
          - make the spell deal some damage on every failed save
          - don't require the saves to be consecutive
          - the third failed save deals extra damage
          - no concentration needed



          It's still not my favorite kind of spell, but it's more flexible in its use than before and far less swingy.






          share|improve this answer












          The other answers give a good picture on why the spell is, from a mechanical perspective, too weak. I will touch on that too, but also a couple of game design points that might help yiu understand why this spell won't work very well.



          From a purely mechanical point of view, "succeed on more rolls to inflict more damage" is a workable concept. The expected damage output should be very high compared to normal cantrips to offset the fact that for normal cantrips, two successes (for three castings) inflict 2/3 of the damage one would inflict on three hits, while the "all-or-nothing" approach of the three word curse would inflict no damage unless all rolls succeeded. (Or failed, from the saving creature's POV)



          However, mechanical balance isn't enough to make a cantrip good. I forecast problems relating to the use of this spell in tables.



          It should be used early...



          Suppose you're fighting a group of nasties and choose to use TWC. Three rounds later, you may have a chance to deal 5d8 damage ...if the combat is still going on. Many encounters last for a surprisingly small number of rounds, so TWC: Nails would probably find itself used mostly as an opener, because it might not get a chance to fire later on and 5d8 against an enemy weakened by the action already would be more likely to be an overkill.



          ...but early turns are too valuable to waste



          Removing enemies from the encounter during the first turns is very valuable in DnD, strategically, because every removed enemy shifts the action economy to favor the PCs. Removing enemies during the first turns is something TWC: Nails can't do, but since it has little use later in the combat too, it's an inadvisable spell to use regardless.



          Inaction is boring



          This is the worst part to me. TWC: Nails will have the player essentially skipping three turns in order to have a chance to deal relatively massive damage. Assuming the spell dealt enough damage to be mechanically appealing, you'd be promoting an extremely boring style of gameplay to your players --- don't do that. As a general rule, make fun choices strong and strong choices fun, so players don't feel tempted to min-max themselves into something boring.



          Poor party synergy



          Especially assuming the cantrip gets the damage buff to make it mechanically competitive, another problem sets in --- it's overkill against many types of enemies. To avoid wasting that sweet damage, it encourages the players to not target the enemy targeted with TWC. Reserving enemies for oneself gets stale fast and can cause a lot of tension among the players, and can also result in very swingy outcomes: if the spell fails, you're gonna wish you had put in some damage instead of trusting the dice.



          Bookkeeping



          The spell forces an additional bookkeeping need for the players or the GM. It's a minor issue, but still one more thing I'd change.



          Overall



          The spell seems like something that might be a workable concept in a computer game where turns can be executed in mere seconds. However, in DnD, I think even the part where you have to idle during combat to have a chance to deal damage is unacceptable. The spell's concept is neat, but ultimately just a gimmick that can't be the sole justification of its existence.



          If you want to preserve the "three strikes", I recommend the following changes:
          - make the spell deal some damage on every failed save
          - don't require the saves to be consecutive
          - the third failed save deals extra damage
          - no concentration needed



          It's still not my favorite kind of spell, but it's more flexible in its use than before and far less swingy.







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          answered Nov 19 at 6:46









          kviiri

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              Way too weak.



              Most foes will be dead before it does anything. And even if the target fails every save, it is 3 actions for 22.5 damage or 7.5 damage/action.



              Unlike most attacks, you have to hit 3 times for it to do anything.



              If the foe fails 60% of the time that is a 21.6% chance it does anything. If they fail 80% of the time, your chance of it doing damage is about 50-50. This is horrible.



              3 turn delay, horrible accuracy, mediocre effect, bad scaling.




              Three-Word Curse: Nails



              Enchantment cantrip



              Casting Time: 1 action



              Range: 60 feet



              Components: V, M (a fragment of ram horn)



              Duration: Concentration, up to 1 minute



              As an action, you speak the first word in a demonic tongue slowly cursing the mind of a single creature you can see within range who can hear you. The target creature must make a Wisdom saving throw. If they succeed, the spell fails. If they fail, they suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn and feel nails hovering around their head in every direction. They remain under the curse until concentration is broken, or a minute passes.



              While the creature remains under the curse, you may spend an action to utter the 2nd word. The creature must make a Wisdom saving throw or feel the tip of the nails penetrate their skull. They suffer 1d8 psychic damage and again suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn.



              If their save succeeds, you can try uttering the 2nd word again until the curse ends or they fail. When they fail their save against the 2nd word, you can now instead utter the 3rd word of the curse as an action once until the curse ends.



              When you utter the 3rd word, they must make another Wisdom save or feel the nails slam into their skull from all directions. This causes 4d8 psychic damage, and they suffer disadvantage on all attacks until the end of your next turn. Once the 3rd word has been uttered, the curse ends, regardless of the result of the save.



              The spell's damage increases by 1d8 when you reach 5th level, 11th and 17th level. This applies to the damage from both the 2nd and 3rd word.




              I did a few things.




              1. I added disadvantage on attacks. Like vicious mockery.


              2. I moved some damage up to the 2nd curse word.


              3. I doubled the rate of damage scaling (by having it apply twice).


              4. You can now utter the first word of the curse and hold it in reserve with concentration.


              5. Succeeding in a save against the 2nd word doesn't remove the curse. The caster can try again and again until it takes hold.



              The curse now has an effect right away (disadvantage). If you hit "twice" you get damage similar to Vicious Mockery, and 3 times to deal decent damage.



              Ignoring concentration, this ability is now stronger than Vicious Mockery. Add in concentration and it looks more reasonable.






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                From the description of the spell you can repeat the 3rd word over and over again once you get to it. is this intended? that much damage every turn seems powerful even after the concentration and wait. either way is more balenced than the questioned cantra so +1
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:28










              • @rpgstsr no, after the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends. You can repeat the 2nd however. But clarified.
                – Yakk
                Nov 20 at 3:31












              • Perhaps stating that by putting in "once the 3rd word is used it cannot be used again" after "...nails slam into their skull from all sides" would make more sense because as it is it doesn't specify that.
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:34










              • other issues: Damage type of 2nd word (psychic) Damage increases effects 2nd and 3rd? 3rd doesnt end the spell in the description.
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:37












              • @rpgstar "After the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends" -- I am puzzled why that quote isn't clear? Or maybe I misunderstand what you find unclear, for double plus ungood communication. ;)
                – Yakk
                Nov 20 at 3:42

















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              Way too weak.



              Most foes will be dead before it does anything. And even if the target fails every save, it is 3 actions for 22.5 damage or 7.5 damage/action.



              Unlike most attacks, you have to hit 3 times for it to do anything.



              If the foe fails 60% of the time that is a 21.6% chance it does anything. If they fail 80% of the time, your chance of it doing damage is about 50-50. This is horrible.



              3 turn delay, horrible accuracy, mediocre effect, bad scaling.




              Three-Word Curse: Nails



              Enchantment cantrip



              Casting Time: 1 action



              Range: 60 feet



              Components: V, M (a fragment of ram horn)



              Duration: Concentration, up to 1 minute



              As an action, you speak the first word in a demonic tongue slowly cursing the mind of a single creature you can see within range who can hear you. The target creature must make a Wisdom saving throw. If they succeed, the spell fails. If they fail, they suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn and feel nails hovering around their head in every direction. They remain under the curse until concentration is broken, or a minute passes.



              While the creature remains under the curse, you may spend an action to utter the 2nd word. The creature must make a Wisdom saving throw or feel the tip of the nails penetrate their skull. They suffer 1d8 psychic damage and again suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn.



              If their save succeeds, you can try uttering the 2nd word again until the curse ends or they fail. When they fail their save against the 2nd word, you can now instead utter the 3rd word of the curse as an action once until the curse ends.



              When you utter the 3rd word, they must make another Wisdom save or feel the nails slam into their skull from all directions. This causes 4d8 psychic damage, and they suffer disadvantage on all attacks until the end of your next turn. Once the 3rd word has been uttered, the curse ends, regardless of the result of the save.



              The spell's damage increases by 1d8 when you reach 5th level, 11th and 17th level. This applies to the damage from both the 2nd and 3rd word.




              I did a few things.




              1. I added disadvantage on attacks. Like vicious mockery.


              2. I moved some damage up to the 2nd curse word.


              3. I doubled the rate of damage scaling (by having it apply twice).


              4. You can now utter the first word of the curse and hold it in reserve with concentration.


              5. Succeeding in a save against the 2nd word doesn't remove the curse. The caster can try again and again until it takes hold.



              The curse now has an effect right away (disadvantage). If you hit "twice" you get damage similar to Vicious Mockery, and 3 times to deal decent damage.



              Ignoring concentration, this ability is now stronger than Vicious Mockery. Add in concentration and it looks more reasonable.






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                From the description of the spell you can repeat the 3rd word over and over again once you get to it. is this intended? that much damage every turn seems powerful even after the concentration and wait. either way is more balenced than the questioned cantra so +1
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:28










              • @rpgstsr no, after the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends. You can repeat the 2nd however. But clarified.
                – Yakk
                Nov 20 at 3:31












              • Perhaps stating that by putting in "once the 3rd word is used it cannot be used again" after "...nails slam into their skull from all sides" would make more sense because as it is it doesn't specify that.
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:34










              • other issues: Damage type of 2nd word (psychic) Damage increases effects 2nd and 3rd? 3rd doesnt end the spell in the description.
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:37












              • @rpgstar "After the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends" -- I am puzzled why that quote isn't clear? Or maybe I misunderstand what you find unclear, for double plus ungood communication. ;)
                – Yakk
                Nov 20 at 3:42















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              Way too weak.



              Most foes will be dead before it does anything. And even if the target fails every save, it is 3 actions for 22.5 damage or 7.5 damage/action.



              Unlike most attacks, you have to hit 3 times for it to do anything.



              If the foe fails 60% of the time that is a 21.6% chance it does anything. If they fail 80% of the time, your chance of it doing damage is about 50-50. This is horrible.



              3 turn delay, horrible accuracy, mediocre effect, bad scaling.




              Three-Word Curse: Nails



              Enchantment cantrip



              Casting Time: 1 action



              Range: 60 feet



              Components: V, M (a fragment of ram horn)



              Duration: Concentration, up to 1 minute



              As an action, you speak the first word in a demonic tongue slowly cursing the mind of a single creature you can see within range who can hear you. The target creature must make a Wisdom saving throw. If they succeed, the spell fails. If they fail, they suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn and feel nails hovering around their head in every direction. They remain under the curse until concentration is broken, or a minute passes.



              While the creature remains under the curse, you may spend an action to utter the 2nd word. The creature must make a Wisdom saving throw or feel the tip of the nails penetrate their skull. They suffer 1d8 psychic damage and again suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn.



              If their save succeeds, you can try uttering the 2nd word again until the curse ends or they fail. When they fail their save against the 2nd word, you can now instead utter the 3rd word of the curse as an action once until the curse ends.



              When you utter the 3rd word, they must make another Wisdom save or feel the nails slam into their skull from all directions. This causes 4d8 psychic damage, and they suffer disadvantage on all attacks until the end of your next turn. Once the 3rd word has been uttered, the curse ends, regardless of the result of the save.



              The spell's damage increases by 1d8 when you reach 5th level, 11th and 17th level. This applies to the damage from both the 2nd and 3rd word.




              I did a few things.




              1. I added disadvantage on attacks. Like vicious mockery.


              2. I moved some damage up to the 2nd curse word.


              3. I doubled the rate of damage scaling (by having it apply twice).


              4. You can now utter the first word of the curse and hold it in reserve with concentration.


              5. Succeeding in a save against the 2nd word doesn't remove the curse. The caster can try again and again until it takes hold.



              The curse now has an effect right away (disadvantage). If you hit "twice" you get damage similar to Vicious Mockery, and 3 times to deal decent damage.



              Ignoring concentration, this ability is now stronger than Vicious Mockery. Add in concentration and it looks more reasonable.






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              Way too weak.



              Most foes will be dead before it does anything. And even if the target fails every save, it is 3 actions for 22.5 damage or 7.5 damage/action.



              Unlike most attacks, you have to hit 3 times for it to do anything.



              If the foe fails 60% of the time that is a 21.6% chance it does anything. If they fail 80% of the time, your chance of it doing damage is about 50-50. This is horrible.



              3 turn delay, horrible accuracy, mediocre effect, bad scaling.




              Three-Word Curse: Nails



              Enchantment cantrip



              Casting Time: 1 action



              Range: 60 feet



              Components: V, M (a fragment of ram horn)



              Duration: Concentration, up to 1 minute



              As an action, you speak the first word in a demonic tongue slowly cursing the mind of a single creature you can see within range who can hear you. The target creature must make a Wisdom saving throw. If they succeed, the spell fails. If they fail, they suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn and feel nails hovering around their head in every direction. They remain under the curse until concentration is broken, or a minute passes.



              While the creature remains under the curse, you may spend an action to utter the 2nd word. The creature must make a Wisdom saving throw or feel the tip of the nails penetrate their skull. They suffer 1d8 psychic damage and again suffer disadvantage on their next attack roll before the start of your next turn.



              If their save succeeds, you can try uttering the 2nd word again until the curse ends or they fail. When they fail their save against the 2nd word, you can now instead utter the 3rd word of the curse as an action once until the curse ends.



              When you utter the 3rd word, they must make another Wisdom save or feel the nails slam into their skull from all directions. This causes 4d8 psychic damage, and they suffer disadvantage on all attacks until the end of your next turn. Once the 3rd word has been uttered, the curse ends, regardless of the result of the save.



              The spell's damage increases by 1d8 when you reach 5th level, 11th and 17th level. This applies to the damage from both the 2nd and 3rd word.




              I did a few things.




              1. I added disadvantage on attacks. Like vicious mockery.


              2. I moved some damage up to the 2nd curse word.


              3. I doubled the rate of damage scaling (by having it apply twice).


              4. You can now utter the first word of the curse and hold it in reserve with concentration.


              5. Succeeding in a save against the 2nd word doesn't remove the curse. The caster can try again and again until it takes hold.



              The curse now has an effect right away (disadvantage). If you hit "twice" you get damage similar to Vicious Mockery, and 3 times to deal decent damage.



              Ignoring concentration, this ability is now stronger than Vicious Mockery. Add in concentration and it looks more reasonable.







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                From the description of the spell you can repeat the 3rd word over and over again once you get to it. is this intended? that much damage every turn seems powerful even after the concentration and wait. either way is more balenced than the questioned cantra so +1
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:28










              • @rpgstsr no, after the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends. You can repeat the 2nd however. But clarified.
                – Yakk
                Nov 20 at 3:31












              • Perhaps stating that by putting in "once the 3rd word is used it cannot be used again" after "...nails slam into their skull from all sides" would make more sense because as it is it doesn't specify that.
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:34










              • other issues: Damage type of 2nd word (psychic) Damage increases effects 2nd and 3rd? 3rd doesnt end the spell in the description.
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:37












              • @rpgstar "After the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends" -- I am puzzled why that quote isn't clear? Or maybe I misunderstand what you find unclear, for double plus ungood communication. ;)
                – Yakk
                Nov 20 at 3:42
















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                From the description of the spell you can repeat the 3rd word over and over again once you get to it. is this intended? that much damage every turn seems powerful even after the concentration and wait. either way is more balenced than the questioned cantra so +1
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:28










              • @rpgstsr no, after the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends. You can repeat the 2nd however. But clarified.
                – Yakk
                Nov 20 at 3:31












              • Perhaps stating that by putting in "once the 3rd word is used it cannot be used again" after "...nails slam into their skull from all sides" would make more sense because as it is it doesn't specify that.
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:34










              • other issues: Damage type of 2nd word (psychic) Damage increases effects 2nd and 3rd? 3rd doesnt end the spell in the description.
                – rpgstar
                Nov 20 at 3:37












              • @rpgstar "After the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends" -- I am puzzled why that quote isn't clear? Or maybe I misunderstand what you find unclear, for double plus ungood communication. ;)
                – Yakk
                Nov 20 at 3:42










              1




              1




              From the description of the spell you can repeat the 3rd word over and over again once you get to it. is this intended? that much damage every turn seems powerful even after the concentration and wait. either way is more balenced than the questioned cantra so +1
              – rpgstar
              Nov 20 at 3:28




              From the description of the spell you can repeat the 3rd word over and over again once you get to it. is this intended? that much damage every turn seems powerful even after the concentration and wait. either way is more balenced than the questioned cantra so +1
              – rpgstar
              Nov 20 at 3:28












              @rpgstsr no, after the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends. You can repeat the 2nd however. But clarified.
              – Yakk
              Nov 20 at 3:31






              @rpgstsr no, after the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends. You can repeat the 2nd however. But clarified.
              – Yakk
              Nov 20 at 3:31














              Perhaps stating that by putting in "once the 3rd word is used it cannot be used again" after "...nails slam into their skull from all sides" would make more sense because as it is it doesn't specify that.
              – rpgstar
              Nov 20 at 3:34




              Perhaps stating that by putting in "once the 3rd word is used it cannot be used again" after "...nails slam into their skull from all sides" would make more sense because as it is it doesn't specify that.
              – rpgstar
              Nov 20 at 3:34












              other issues: Damage type of 2nd word (psychic) Damage increases effects 2nd and 3rd? 3rd doesnt end the spell in the description.
              – rpgstar
              Nov 20 at 3:37






              other issues: Damage type of 2nd word (psychic) Damage increases effects 2nd and 3rd? 3rd doesnt end the spell in the description.
              – rpgstar
              Nov 20 at 3:37














              @rpgstar "After the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends" -- I am puzzled why that quote isn't clear? Or maybe I misunderstand what you find unclear, for double plus ungood communication. ;)
              – Yakk
              Nov 20 at 3:42






              @rpgstar "After the 3rd word is uttered the curse ends" -- I am puzzled why that quote isn't clear? Or maybe I misunderstand what you find unclear, for double plus ungood communication. ;)
              – Yakk
              Nov 20 at 3:42












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              Probability



              Your proposed mechanism requires 3 consecutive failed saves starting with the first. As such, the 1 minute duration is irrelevant - it will all be over in at most 3 rounds.



              D&D aims to have a "hit rate" (including failed saving throws) of about 60%. assuming that your target has this chance of failing their saving throw, chaining 3 of these together gives a 21.6% success rate.



              In addition, you are proposing that this requires concentration. So, unlike every other damaging cantrip it is not certain that it will "go off" and it means you can't be concentrating on anything else.



              Damaging cantrips



              Damaging cantrips are for a spellcaster what making an attack is for a martial class - the default action to take when you have no better options. Specifically:




              • They don't use up resources (e.g. spell slots)

              • They use up 1 action

              • They are all or nothing in terms of damage

              • They scale with character level, either by increasing in damage or adding additional targets


              Saving throw cantrips



              There are 4 cantrips in the PHB that have a saving throw:



              $$begin{array}{|c|c|c|c|c|c|}
              hline
              textbf{Spell}& textbf{Range} & textbf{Damage} & textbf{Expected*} & textbf{Save} &textbf{Extra} \ hline
              textit{Acid Splash} & text{60} & text{1d6 acid} & 2.1text{ or }4.2 & text{Dex} & text{Up to 2 targets within 5 feet} \ hline
              textit{Poison Spray} & text{10} & text{1d12 poison} & 3.9 & text{Con} & text{} \ hline
              textit{Sacred Flame} & text{60} & text{1d8 radiant} & 2.7 & text{Dex} & text{} \ hline
              textit{Vicious Mockery} & text{60} & text{1d4 psychic} & 1.5 & text{Wis} & text{Disadvantage on next attack roll} \ hline
              textit{TWC: Nails} & text{60} & text{5d8 psychic} & 1.62 & text{Wis} & text{Takes 3 rounds w/- concentration} \ hline
              end{array}$$




              • Expected damage assuming the target needs to roll an 13 or better to save (60% success rate) and dividing by 3 for your cantrip because it takes 3 rounds.


              So, given these comparisons, would you chose this cantrip? By the way, this is at levels 1-4 - the spell only gets worse after than in comparison.



              Use one of these as a model



              Make it the same as Sacred Flame only with psychic damage and your flavour text.



              Or reduce the range and do more damage like Poison Spray or reduce the damage and allow it to affect more people like Acid Splash or reduce the damage and give it an effect like Vicious Mockery.



              Whatever you do, you need to drop the multi-round nature of the effect - that's not how cantrips work.






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              • The effect of a save ending the spell only is discussed in the context of the first save. If the target fails the first save, subsequent saves do not end the spell.
                – Harper
                Nov 19 at 22:03








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                @Harper Disagreed. As written, succeeding the (first) Saving Throw ends the spell. The other saving throws are just repetitions ("you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again."), thus are subject to the same conditions, as it is the same Saving Throw, and should also end the spell. That said, it does not make any sense that the duration is 10 rounds, as it will either deal damage in the first three rounds or end as soon as the target succeeds, so I suppose this was not intended by the asker.
                – HellSaint
                Nov 20 at 4:02










              • @HellSaint yes I got that meaning the first time I read it. After answers here made me realize the mechanic was completely, obviously idiotic, I read it more closely, because I did not believe people intentionally write obviously idiotic rules. Indeed, failing the second save has a different effect: it does not apply the curse because the curse is already applied. It lasts 1m or until concentration breaks, just as it says. It simply adds another word/stack and the save is to prevent that. Try reading it very carefully, though I agree the wording is too vague for publication.
                – Harper
                Nov 20 at 6:57















              up vote
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              Probability



              Your proposed mechanism requires 3 consecutive failed saves starting with the first. As such, the 1 minute duration is irrelevant - it will all be over in at most 3 rounds.



              D&D aims to have a "hit rate" (including failed saving throws) of about 60%. assuming that your target has this chance of failing their saving throw, chaining 3 of these together gives a 21.6% success rate.



              In addition, you are proposing that this requires concentration. So, unlike every other damaging cantrip it is not certain that it will "go off" and it means you can't be concentrating on anything else.



              Damaging cantrips



              Damaging cantrips are for a spellcaster what making an attack is for a martial class - the default action to take when you have no better options. Specifically:




              • They don't use up resources (e.g. spell slots)

              • They use up 1 action

              • They are all or nothing in terms of damage

              • They scale with character level, either by increasing in damage or adding additional targets


              Saving throw cantrips



              There are 4 cantrips in the PHB that have a saving throw:



              $$begin{array}{|c|c|c|c|c|c|}
              hline
              textbf{Spell}& textbf{Range} & textbf{Damage} & textbf{Expected*} & textbf{Save} &textbf{Extra} \ hline
              textit{Acid Splash} & text{60} & text{1d6 acid} & 2.1text{ or }4.2 & text{Dex} & text{Up to 2 targets within 5 feet} \ hline
              textit{Poison Spray} & text{10} & text{1d12 poison} & 3.9 & text{Con} & text{} \ hline
              textit{Sacred Flame} & text{60} & text{1d8 radiant} & 2.7 & text{Dex} & text{} \ hline
              textit{Vicious Mockery} & text{60} & text{1d4 psychic} & 1.5 & text{Wis} & text{Disadvantage on next attack roll} \ hline
              textit{TWC: Nails} & text{60} & text{5d8 psychic} & 1.62 & text{Wis} & text{Takes 3 rounds w/- concentration} \ hline
              end{array}$$




              • Expected damage assuming the target needs to roll an 13 or better to save (60% success rate) and dividing by 3 for your cantrip because it takes 3 rounds.


              So, given these comparisons, would you chose this cantrip? By the way, this is at levels 1-4 - the spell only gets worse after than in comparison.



              Use one of these as a model



              Make it the same as Sacred Flame only with psychic damage and your flavour text.



              Or reduce the range and do more damage like Poison Spray or reduce the damage and allow it to affect more people like Acid Splash or reduce the damage and give it an effect like Vicious Mockery.



              Whatever you do, you need to drop the multi-round nature of the effect - that's not how cantrips work.






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              • The effect of a save ending the spell only is discussed in the context of the first save. If the target fails the first save, subsequent saves do not end the spell.
                – Harper
                Nov 19 at 22:03








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                @Harper Disagreed. As written, succeeding the (first) Saving Throw ends the spell. The other saving throws are just repetitions ("you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again."), thus are subject to the same conditions, as it is the same Saving Throw, and should also end the spell. That said, it does not make any sense that the duration is 10 rounds, as it will either deal damage in the first three rounds or end as soon as the target succeeds, so I suppose this was not intended by the asker.
                – HellSaint
                Nov 20 at 4:02










              • @HellSaint yes I got that meaning the first time I read it. After answers here made me realize the mechanic was completely, obviously idiotic, I read it more closely, because I did not believe people intentionally write obviously idiotic rules. Indeed, failing the second save has a different effect: it does not apply the curse because the curse is already applied. It lasts 1m or until concentration breaks, just as it says. It simply adds another word/stack and the save is to prevent that. Try reading it very carefully, though I agree the wording is too vague for publication.
                – Harper
                Nov 20 at 6:57













              up vote
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              down vote










              up vote
              6
              down vote









              Probability



              Your proposed mechanism requires 3 consecutive failed saves starting with the first. As such, the 1 minute duration is irrelevant - it will all be over in at most 3 rounds.



              D&D aims to have a "hit rate" (including failed saving throws) of about 60%. assuming that your target has this chance of failing their saving throw, chaining 3 of these together gives a 21.6% success rate.



              In addition, you are proposing that this requires concentration. So, unlike every other damaging cantrip it is not certain that it will "go off" and it means you can't be concentrating on anything else.



              Damaging cantrips



              Damaging cantrips are for a spellcaster what making an attack is for a martial class - the default action to take when you have no better options. Specifically:




              • They don't use up resources (e.g. spell slots)

              • They use up 1 action

              • They are all or nothing in terms of damage

              • They scale with character level, either by increasing in damage or adding additional targets


              Saving throw cantrips



              There are 4 cantrips in the PHB that have a saving throw:



              $$begin{array}{|c|c|c|c|c|c|}
              hline
              textbf{Spell}& textbf{Range} & textbf{Damage} & textbf{Expected*} & textbf{Save} &textbf{Extra} \ hline
              textit{Acid Splash} & text{60} & text{1d6 acid} & 2.1text{ or }4.2 & text{Dex} & text{Up to 2 targets within 5 feet} \ hline
              textit{Poison Spray} & text{10} & text{1d12 poison} & 3.9 & text{Con} & text{} \ hline
              textit{Sacred Flame} & text{60} & text{1d8 radiant} & 2.7 & text{Dex} & text{} \ hline
              textit{Vicious Mockery} & text{60} & text{1d4 psychic} & 1.5 & text{Wis} & text{Disadvantage on next attack roll} \ hline
              textit{TWC: Nails} & text{60} & text{5d8 psychic} & 1.62 & text{Wis} & text{Takes 3 rounds w/- concentration} \ hline
              end{array}$$




              • Expected damage assuming the target needs to roll an 13 or better to save (60% success rate) and dividing by 3 for your cantrip because it takes 3 rounds.


              So, given these comparisons, would you chose this cantrip? By the way, this is at levels 1-4 - the spell only gets worse after than in comparison.



              Use one of these as a model



              Make it the same as Sacred Flame only with psychic damage and your flavour text.



              Or reduce the range and do more damage like Poison Spray or reduce the damage and allow it to affect more people like Acid Splash or reduce the damage and give it an effect like Vicious Mockery.



              Whatever you do, you need to drop the multi-round nature of the effect - that's not how cantrips work.






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              Probability



              Your proposed mechanism requires 3 consecutive failed saves starting with the first. As such, the 1 minute duration is irrelevant - it will all be over in at most 3 rounds.



              D&D aims to have a "hit rate" (including failed saving throws) of about 60%. assuming that your target has this chance of failing their saving throw, chaining 3 of these together gives a 21.6% success rate.



              In addition, you are proposing that this requires concentration. So, unlike every other damaging cantrip it is not certain that it will "go off" and it means you can't be concentrating on anything else.



              Damaging cantrips



              Damaging cantrips are for a spellcaster what making an attack is for a martial class - the default action to take when you have no better options. Specifically:




              • They don't use up resources (e.g. spell slots)

              • They use up 1 action

              • They are all or nothing in terms of damage

              • They scale with character level, either by increasing in damage or adding additional targets


              Saving throw cantrips



              There are 4 cantrips in the PHB that have a saving throw:



              $$begin{array}{|c|c|c|c|c|c|}
              hline
              textbf{Spell}& textbf{Range} & textbf{Damage} & textbf{Expected*} & textbf{Save} &textbf{Extra} \ hline
              textit{Acid Splash} & text{60} & text{1d6 acid} & 2.1text{ or }4.2 & text{Dex} & text{Up to 2 targets within 5 feet} \ hline
              textit{Poison Spray} & text{10} & text{1d12 poison} & 3.9 & text{Con} & text{} \ hline
              textit{Sacred Flame} & text{60} & text{1d8 radiant} & 2.7 & text{Dex} & text{} \ hline
              textit{Vicious Mockery} & text{60} & text{1d4 psychic} & 1.5 & text{Wis} & text{Disadvantage on next attack roll} \ hline
              textit{TWC: Nails} & text{60} & text{5d8 psychic} & 1.62 & text{Wis} & text{Takes 3 rounds w/- concentration} \ hline
              end{array}$$




              • Expected damage assuming the target needs to roll an 13 or better to save (60% success rate) and dividing by 3 for your cantrip because it takes 3 rounds.


              So, given these comparisons, would you chose this cantrip? By the way, this is at levels 1-4 - the spell only gets worse after than in comparison.



              Use one of these as a model



              Make it the same as Sacred Flame only with psychic damage and your flavour text.



              Or reduce the range and do more damage like Poison Spray or reduce the damage and allow it to affect more people like Acid Splash or reduce the damage and give it an effect like Vicious Mockery.



              Whatever you do, you need to drop the multi-round nature of the effect - that's not how cantrips work.







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              edited Nov 19 at 3:49









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              • The effect of a save ending the spell only is discussed in the context of the first save. If the target fails the first save, subsequent saves do not end the spell.
                – Harper
                Nov 19 at 22:03








              • 1




                @Harper Disagreed. As written, succeeding the (first) Saving Throw ends the spell. The other saving throws are just repetitions ("you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again."), thus are subject to the same conditions, as it is the same Saving Throw, and should also end the spell. That said, it does not make any sense that the duration is 10 rounds, as it will either deal damage in the first three rounds or end as soon as the target succeeds, so I suppose this was not intended by the asker.
                – HellSaint
                Nov 20 at 4:02










              • @HellSaint yes I got that meaning the first time I read it. After answers here made me realize the mechanic was completely, obviously idiotic, I read it more closely, because I did not believe people intentionally write obviously idiotic rules. Indeed, failing the second save has a different effect: it does not apply the curse because the curse is already applied. It lasts 1m or until concentration breaks, just as it says. It simply adds another word/stack and the save is to prevent that. Try reading it very carefully, though I agree the wording is too vague for publication.
                – Harper
                Nov 20 at 6:57


















              • The effect of a save ending the spell only is discussed in the context of the first save. If the target fails the first save, subsequent saves do not end the spell.
                – Harper
                Nov 19 at 22:03








              • 1




                @Harper Disagreed. As written, succeeding the (first) Saving Throw ends the spell. The other saving throws are just repetitions ("you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again."), thus are subject to the same conditions, as it is the same Saving Throw, and should also end the spell. That said, it does not make any sense that the duration is 10 rounds, as it will either deal damage in the first three rounds or end as soon as the target succeeds, so I suppose this was not intended by the asker.
                – HellSaint
                Nov 20 at 4:02










              • @HellSaint yes I got that meaning the first time I read it. After answers here made me realize the mechanic was completely, obviously idiotic, I read it more closely, because I did not believe people intentionally write obviously idiotic rules. Indeed, failing the second save has a different effect: it does not apply the curse because the curse is already applied. It lasts 1m or until concentration breaks, just as it says. It simply adds another word/stack and the save is to prevent that. Try reading it very carefully, though I agree the wording is too vague for publication.
                – Harper
                Nov 20 at 6:57
















              The effect of a save ending the spell only is discussed in the context of the first save. If the target fails the first save, subsequent saves do not end the spell.
              – Harper
              Nov 19 at 22:03






              The effect of a save ending the spell only is discussed in the context of the first save. If the target fails the first save, subsequent saves do not end the spell.
              – Harper
              Nov 19 at 22:03






              1




              1




              @Harper Disagreed. As written, succeeding the (first) Saving Throw ends the spell. The other saving throws are just repetitions ("you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again."), thus are subject to the same conditions, as it is the same Saving Throw, and should also end the spell. That said, it does not make any sense that the duration is 10 rounds, as it will either deal damage in the first three rounds or end as soon as the target succeeds, so I suppose this was not intended by the asker.
              – HellSaint
              Nov 20 at 4:02




              @Harper Disagreed. As written, succeeding the (first) Saving Throw ends the spell. The other saving throws are just repetitions ("you may use your action to have the target attempt the Wisdom saving throw again."), thus are subject to the same conditions, as it is the same Saving Throw, and should also end the spell. That said, it does not make any sense that the duration is 10 rounds, as it will either deal damage in the first three rounds or end as soon as the target succeeds, so I suppose this was not intended by the asker.
              – HellSaint
              Nov 20 at 4:02












              @HellSaint yes I got that meaning the first time I read it. After answers here made me realize the mechanic was completely, obviously idiotic, I read it more closely, because I did not believe people intentionally write obviously idiotic rules. Indeed, failing the second save has a different effect: it does not apply the curse because the curse is already applied. It lasts 1m or until concentration breaks, just as it says. It simply adds another word/stack and the save is to prevent that. Try reading it very carefully, though I agree the wording is too vague for publication.
              – Harper
              Nov 20 at 6:57




              @HellSaint yes I got that meaning the first time I read it. After answers here made me realize the mechanic was completely, obviously idiotic, I read it more closely, because I did not believe people intentionally write obviously idiotic rules. Indeed, failing the second save has a different effect: it does not apply the curse because the curse is already applied. It lasts 1m or until concentration breaks, just as it says. It simply adds another word/stack and the save is to prevent that. Try reading it very carefully, though I agree the wording is too vague for publication.
              – Harper
              Nov 20 at 6:57










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              As other posters have said, it is too risky and action consuming for the reward. I think spending such a large portion of the combat on just one skill sounds like the players would have less fun.



              What if you make it cost an action to cast, and then cost a bonus action to mutter an additional word. Each word could do something immediately and target different creatures. At each level in which you would normally grant it straight extra damage, you could add an extra word in the sequence, possibly based on the characters lore.



              Adjust the balance accordingly and this sounds like a fun unique ability.






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                As other posters have said, it is too risky and action consuming for the reward. I think spending such a large portion of the combat on just one skill sounds like the players would have less fun.



                What if you make it cost an action to cast, and then cost a bonus action to mutter an additional word. Each word could do something immediately and target different creatures. At each level in which you would normally grant it straight extra damage, you could add an extra word in the sequence, possibly based on the characters lore.



                Adjust the balance accordingly and this sounds like a fun unique ability.






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                  As other posters have said, it is too risky and action consuming for the reward. I think spending such a large portion of the combat on just one skill sounds like the players would have less fun.



                  What if you make it cost an action to cast, and then cost a bonus action to mutter an additional word. Each word could do something immediately and target different creatures. At each level in which you would normally grant it straight extra damage, you could add an extra word in the sequence, possibly based on the characters lore.



                  Adjust the balance accordingly and this sounds like a fun unique ability.






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                  As other posters have said, it is too risky and action consuming for the reward. I think spending such a large portion of the combat on just one skill sounds like the players would have less fun.



                  What if you make it cost an action to cast, and then cost a bonus action to mutter an additional word. Each word could do something immediately and target different creatures. At each level in which you would normally grant it straight extra damage, you could add an extra word in the sequence, possibly based on the characters lore.



                  Adjust the balance accordingly and this sounds like a fun unique ability.







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